Here's my 10 seconds of courage. I wrote this a while ago, and I'm entering it into a nonfiction memoir contest. It's pretty personal. What do you guys think?

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@Jacobevans 3/3 Finally: the piece ends with a vulnerable moment that we get to see directly: an emotional outburst in the airport that evokes tenderness from a stranger. That's in contrast to Jacob in paragraph 1, with his facade of pleasantries. Currently, you tell us about that Jacob -- you describe him. I wondered whether this transformation would be more powerful if, instead of telling us, you showed him to us: one scene that captures his reluctance to make an honest connection.

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